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Friday 21 August 2015

Baking trailer

This week we have been doing movie trailers. My one is based on baking, we have done this on a app called Imovie. I did mine on a ipad.I made this with Vaidika and Manahal.


We hope you like it please leave a comment.

Thursday 20 August 2015

My Camp Describe A moment

I am going to share my writing and I hope you can image which moment this was. Please leave a comment down below about what you thought the moment was.

My personal learning goal is:



WALT: describe a moment in time.




Planning (4 sentences ONLY):
I see…people surfing, water, life jackets, and wet suit also waves.  

I hear… The water, waves, people encouraging.

I feel…  scared , excited , awesome. , proud.

I wonder… how there were so many big waves?




Signs of Success (Success Criteria):
I will have been successful when I have used:
Self
Partner or Teacher
  • written in the present tense
Yes
Yes
  • interesting language features (adjectives, adverbs, verbs, simile, metaphor, alliteration, idiom, onomatopoeia)
Yes
Yes
  • a range of sentences effectively for planned impact (short sentences used for pace and impact, longer sentences to move the action along)
Yes
Yes
  • use 5 (or a mix of) senses to paint a picture in the reader’s mind
    hear/see/feel/touch/taste
Ye
Yes
  • used paragraphs (topic sentence and supporting ideas)

Yes


Today’s learning focus is: to write an introduction that hooks the reader in.


Signs of Success (Success Criteria):
I will have been successful when I have used:
Self
Partner or Teacher
  • Show don’t tell e.g. onomatopoeia, speech, question, describe the setting, action
Yes
Yes
  • Language features e.g. simile, metaphor, alliteration idiom
Yes
Yes
  • VCOP
Yes
Yes


Remember: great writers use VCOP in ALL writing!


Begin writing your writing here:


One winter morning, I got up and wore my swimming suit and put my clothes in top.I ran outside and started doing activities, I took my clothes off and put my wet suit on. I wore my life jacket and sat on a log. I listen to the instructor and ran into the water. I tried but I couldn’t do it and so Mrs Archer helped me and as I went with the waves it felt like i was the main one and it made me feel  proud. I was scared and nervous but then I felt awesome like I was flying. But luck James, Ashlyn, Lolo they got to stand and went all the way. But our instructor Gus had done a flip and he was an expert. I felt awesome because I was in the middle of the waves. I could see people laughing, and smiling it was a really good moment. I could hear Mrs Kingston's photos clicking and people saying “ohh” and blaming others that they bumped them. I could see Tui enjoying. It started to spit and then it stopped, and it was Sunny. It wasn’t raining much but it was raining. At the end I threw my life jacket.


Your next step is to : have less detail.
Marked by : Tuitofa Nuuola


The Edited piece of my writing.
I felt Awesome and I accidentally drank some salt water.I felt proud like I was the main one in the middle of the waves. I could see waves in front of me,  I felt awesome when I caught my first wave and it was so cool.

Wednesday 19 August 2015

Maths Week!!!!!

Last week we have been doing presentations on famous mathematicians. I hope you like ours.

Tuesday 4 August 2015

Sir Peter Blake

I have been doing a presentation with other people in my class about Sir Peter Blake, Want to find more or some information about him then have a read of the presentation.